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Hogwarts Overexposed Chapter 11

szaleniec1000 Aug 08, 2014 02:22

This chapter is called "Driving the Point Home" and I'll just let that speak for itself.

( Hogwarts Overexposed Chapter 11 )

show don't tell, the pansexual '50s, ron is ooc, draco is ooc, pov!fail, welsh railway, are you a witch or not, retcon yay, damning with faint praise, hermione in name only, out of order, breast fixation, epic fail, please recycle where facilities exist, department of redundancy department, too much information, badfic:hogwarts overexposed, salazar is evil, completely nonsexual, i can has characterisation, sexism, how is babby formed, nudity for everyone, trelawney is ooc, harry potter, golden water, dialogue is not narration, exact eavesdropping, continuity isn't optional, education system from hell, approved hogwarts exposed dialogue voice, aoc does not work that way

Hogwarts Overexposed Chapter 10

szaleniec1000 Aug 05, 2014 19:36

So, what to do when you've written your daring rescue and confrontation with the arch-villain in Chapter 9 of 24? Why, take a detour into PSA Hell and bad soap opera shenanigans, of course!

( Hogwarts Overexposed Chapter 10 )

show don't tell, percy is evil, knickers, did not do the bloody research, informed wrongness, draco is ooc, my argument is pastede on yay, pov!fail, welsh railway, are you a witch or not, priorities be damned, retcon yay, madam malkin's mugglewear, ineffectual villainy, convention of the psychics, breast fixation, anticlimax, epic fail, please recycle where facilities exist, a description would be nice, badfic:hogwarts overexposed, department of redundancy department, hypocrisy, completely nonsexual, anvil of foreshadowing, draco trilogy wants him back, ginny is ooc, pointless wittering, you call that pacing, worst dating advice ever, idiot balls for everyone, continuity isn't optional, snape is ooc, education system from hell, approved hogwarts exposed dialogue voice, i blame the parents

Hogwarts Overexposed Chapter 4

szaleniec1000 Jul 06, 2014 22:25

The previous chapter ended with an outburst of disembodied dialogue claiming that something or someone unknown was attacking "those girls", who could have been the main cast but could just as easily have been random bystanders. Now for the "resolution". Yes, it's bad.

( Hogwarts Overexposed Chapter 4 )

show don't tell, missed the point of voldemort, honourable member, did not do the bloody research, om nom nom, ron is ooc, symbolic flight, draco is ooc, the nudist doth protest too much, pov!fail, the cake is a lie, welsh railway, are you a witch or not, creepiest toddler ever, tractum ex culo, hermione in name only, breast fixation, anticlimax, soapbox, separated by a common language, bad sex, a description would be nice, badfic:hogwarts overexposed, department of redundancy department, conflict be damned, goose of doom, completely nonsexual, thirty contrivance pileup, i can has characterisation, statute schmatute, sexism, disembodied dialogue, harry potter, dialogue is not narration, approved hogwarts exposed dialogue voice, i blame the parents